They're cool overall, the shapes are pretty and the anatomy interesting. But why is the only way to make something look feminine, to make it look small and put two human breasts on it? Be more creative! There are many ways to make something female, without always adhering to the strict gender roles of todays society. Always baffles me that in movies or series, every single alien has one pair of mammaries plastered on them, no matter what type of being they are.
And as a medical student, I have some input on something here, that doesn't quite make sense. Their immune system being "incredibly adaptive" makes very little sense, when the point it that they don't reject metallic augmentation. Humans have an "aggressieve" immune system, but we don't reject metallic augmentations. And if they are extreemly high tech, they should be able to merely 3D print living organs with the same HLA-type as them. If they can accept organ donors from someone else with completely different tissue types, I fear they wouldn't stand a chance against bacteria, virus or fungus. You can make up another type of immune system than ours, of course. But it still needs to adhere to some rules, which are that the immune system is there to protect them against anything that is not "them", and to tolerate things that are unharmful. With a human, and they for example is treated with immune suppressants, so the immune system wont HATE their new organ, it doesn't take long until they get skin cancer, fungus infections in the strangest of places, or other types of opportunistic infections. So, my point here, is just that if they have a very accepting immune system, that just says "oh fuck it cant beat it, lets join it"... How aren't they full of cancer, fungus or bacteria?
Hope it doesn't sound too nitpicky! They do look very nice
No prob! I love when people take things like this seriously. They're my only species to have a relatively human-ish look, others are much more 'alien' and much less traditional male/female look. These guys were actually born from the idea that when a new species is introduced to the galactic system (or whatever), it is done by a species that looks most like them (to make them less scary). So the very first rule was to make them human-like, to fit that role. They're definitely the odd ones alongside humans in the scale of the galaxy, mammary glands are not so popular there.
A big part of their augmentations are bioengineered so they're mostly organic. And while these days they have the tech to make 3d printed parts and so on, centuries ago they didn't have that technology and that's where the immune system comes in. They could pretty much skip over the part in history where humans are now; able to use/make organic or nonorganic transplants but having problems with the immune system's reaction.
I know a super adaptive immune system creates a problem of viruses and so on, but only on Earth. I do like to add some sci-fi logic to this since understandably our way might not be the only way. Sadly my knowledge of immune system is very wikipedia-basic so I can't really go into much details with it. Maybe the learned to bioengineer the viruses too, maybe they don't have viruses and bacteria at all, maybe they have an army of nanobots in their body to fight them, who knows. (I don't )
I'm not entierly sure what you mean with the introduction.. Do you mean for your audience, to not scare them off? Or do you mean in your actual universe? Because if humans and these guys are the only ones who look similar, then..I dont think I quite follow
But still, a body needs a immunesystem that is capable of recognicing thigns that are not part of it. And a world without bacteria, fungus or virus.. As all life emerge from simple one celled organisms, I can't envision a world without it. And the moment you have micro organisms that pose as threats, you need some sort of defence. You can add a lot of science fiction here, make something really unique. Maybe they have a symbiosis with some sort of bacteria (Like we have with the mitochondria within each of our cells), that acts like it's immune system, and can distinguish between bacteria and other induviduals of their species. (though then a new problem arises. Bacteria would evolve to look like them. There's always a battle of evolution between invader (bacteria) and protector (immune-system). So the moment a immunesystem is very forgiving, you have a problem.) And say it's not a problem on their planet, but on earth, they would need full body suits, like the quarians, at all times on any place that isn't homeworld. And then you've basically made a mass effect universe. XD
Nanobots would be a smart idea. Though I would instead make them as bioengeneered immune cells. Humanity already have this, and we already can modify viruses as we please. If they are highly advanced, this should be like childs play to them.
I honestly love to make the biology as realistic as possible though my limit is that it that the realism has to make something fascinating rather than boring. The beauty of sci-fi(ction) is that even the weirdest ideas can potentially work, since our world-view is still very limited and I'd hate to toss away ideas just because they seem impossible to us.
To me it seems plausible that their basic biology is just competely different compared to humans, and thus their immune system works differently. But only in their own habitat.
So once they started to explore other planets, they had to 'fix' their immune system to work in a different environment. Since they are really (like, really) technically advanced, some kind of nanobot army or bioengineered cells would make more sense than a quarian-like bodysuit. A mix of those two would probably work the best, something that the other can't fix, the other will and so on.
And yeah I was talking in the context of this universe, not our real one. The basic idea is that the less advanced species (ie humans) are kept under surveillance until they're deemed ready for interstellar life.
The advanced species nominate one race amongst their own, an agent, that basically will let the new species know they're not alone in the universe. In this case chou-wai were the human's 'first contact'. They contacted the humans and slowly introduced them to life outside the Solar System.
The agent is chosen by the similarity of looks and culture, to lessen the shock of a first contact as much as possible. Chou-wai were chosen since they look and act at least somewhat like humans. Obviously there are differences but compared to the other species, they're the closest ones there are.
Aaah, I see, I like that idea With the alien ambassadors looking somewhat like them. Makes the shock less if they look somewhat like them, as opposed to Chthulhu suddenly rollign out of a huge ship to say " 'Sup."
And yes, of course, science fiction is about taking some concepts that are unthinkable for us, and make it real. But the problem is that when you use scientific explanations from our world, and apply it in a way that doesn't fit, the people who work in that field at best gets a laugh, at worse is completely dragged out of the plot and go "Say what????" Like, example, Mass Effect again, since I now know you know it The infamous "humans are allergic to turians, might get anafylacti shok"... Mordin being a scientist and a doctor, makes anyone with basic medical knowledge disbelieve the character, as it doesn't work with todays established, scientific rules. So it makes people who is as insane as me with details completely derail and my brain goes into slow-time to analyse everythign about that one scene that is wrong.
...Okay I bable a lot there XD But what I mean is, with sci fy, you can make up your own rules as much as you want. But the moment you start mixing our science into it, explaining some phenomenon using an established rule for humans, that doesn't work properly to explain something in your world, people like me is derailed XD At times, with science fiction, some things are better left un-explained.
And I would absolutely assume every species would need to use a biosuit like that at first contact, and then go over to using bioengineered immunecells that have been pre-programmed to fight the dangers of that planet. I can go into more details on how human immunesystems works, if you want me to bore you a bit with that (and when I say bore, I'm just jesting.. Our immune system is goddamn epic as hell 8D But I wont spew in details about it if you're not interested^^ But maybe you would see why I go a bit O-O at the prospect of a very adaptable immunesystem.^^)
I do understand where you're coming from. It's definitely hard to be an "expert" in a subject matter since it just makes you notice all the mistakes but I think that's a curse that every expert in their field has.
I generally tend to pay much more attention to looks and the evolutionary process behind them. It's easier for me since it's a subject I actually do know something of and it gives a lot more freedom since sometimes evolution is just a chaotic mess.
I wish I could do the same with biological science, especially concerning the evolution of it, but it's a subject matter that's just really hard to get into. I mean I understand the basics but it's difficult to make up ideas that base in alternative, but still possible science.
Though, I don't see why they would ever have to wear bodysuits at any point. It's possible for them to collect samples and do the needed research before contacting humans, and thus being already ready for the environment. Of course it's a bit more work, but since everything is bound by the laws of nature and they are ridiculously smart, it's definitely not impossible.
Also I have to comment a bit here, on evolution and biological science being hard to get into. It really isn't. It just feels somewhat daunting to start reading about, but there are no problems with consulting an expert or just reading "for dummies" explanations on wikipedia or books. Becuase the "its the curse of the experts" really is just an excuse to be lazy. When I write stories, I read up on what I need to. If I write a fight scene, I research what style they're fighting in to make it realistic. Or I have a story set in mayan society, then I read about mayans. its a huge and dauntig subject, sure. But spending a few hours reading about something really expands your own universes and gives you a lot more interesting ideas that you yourself wouldnt think of on your own! And doesnt make the "experts" want to cry (you really dont have to be an expert though, just having had a single biologyclass would be enough to create face palms). For the sake of belieavbility of your universe, I'd absolutely recommend to read a little, and not use the "too bad for experts, they can't possibly expect us to study the very basics of what we're writing about." You don't need to know everything, but at least, when you choose to explain something using todays science, use those explanations right! If not, then just leave why something works open for interpretation.
So don't be scared of science. It's not scary, nor that daunting. That's just an excuse! It would really just help you in giving you more ideas. Hell, just put on some documentaries narrated by Attenborough and you'd already be puking ideas everywhere.^^
You make it sound like I don't do research at all. Trust me I spend a ridiculous amount of time in wikipedia and watching documentaries. Most of my ideas spawn from an interesting fact I've read, not the other way around.
What I meant is even though basics are quite easy (and interesting!) to learn, it's a lot harder use that knowledge in a heavily modified form. Yeah sure I know how cells work like this, but how do I know if they work like this. There's a huge amount of variables to think about and you need a lot more than a few hours to get to know them all.
I think we just have a different way to approach the subject. My aim is more of a fantasy based on reality (..totally stole that from final fantasy). I think that human knowledge is very, very limited and there's a lot we didn't know 100, 50, 20 years ago, even from life on Earth. So I'm absolutely sure there's still a lot to learn that would blow our minds and defy what we call science now. So my designs are more of a 'what-if' kind that bend the lines of what is possible, but still stay inside them. I'm sure that bothers some people, but it's simply a difference in taste. For some Star Wars fans Mass Effect might feel too realistic even when Mass Effect isn't the most well-thought world out there.
If it's been planned beforehand, say visiting earth, they could just take in samples with drones or whatever, and prepare, yes. But I mean in the case of visiting a planet without any sort of preparation. I sure as hell wouldn't want to breathe in the air on a completely different planet... Who knows what sort of organisms are in the air there XD
really cool species. when i first saw this pair i thought they were fish out of water(evolutionally speaking) and by the looks of their "augmented" legsi would've assumed i was right but there's somthing throughing me off, the bit about Ancient Chou-wai gliding through the air at night. more explanation plz, also how do you pronounce thier name. PS also really beautiful but the girl kinda has a infeminate face, i mean the guy also kinda has the same problem but because of their light build i would be ok with letting that one go.
Their ancestors were kind of badass flying squirrels. They had a patagium-like skin that allowed them to glide, so they hunted by stalking the prey in groups and then ambushed it by gliding (and ripping it apart).
A lot of the names are pronounced like I say I say them in finnish but I suck at trying to describe pronounciations. But a japanese pronounciation of choowai comes pretty close so check google translator or whatever if you want to check it out.
And they're not humans so they don't have to be "feminine" or "masculine" because of their gender. By human standards they're both pretty androgynous and that's just who they are.